Fragmented: A Short Movie

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Summary: Two sisters live hating and hiding to each other, but love the same guy.

BLACK SCREEN

The screen shows “We live in a world where fragments are inevitable” – Anonymous

INT. APARTMENT LOBBY. MORNING.

“DAY 1”

Two look-alike, long-haired girls sit idly around the living room. The two sisters are ignoring each other. NEERA, the elder, however, tempestuously tends to talk to DIANDRA in a friendly manner.

NEERA
How’s college?

DIANDRA
Nothing special.

Diandra puts her cellphone on the table before going to the restroom. Neera’s eyes follows her sister wistfully until Diandra’s cellphone rings, showing the name “Quinton” in the screen. Neera idly picks it up.

NEERA
Hello, who’s this?

It’s Quinton. Is Diandra here?

NEERA
She just went away without bringing her phone. Why do you call?

I just want to…

NEERA
You shouldn’t talk with her. You just broke up with her.

Who’s this, anyway? Just give me the pho–

NEERA clicks the phone off and puts it on the sofa. She opens the call log and erases all of Quinton’s call history.

Diandra, tangling her hair, walks out of the restroom approaching Neera.

DIANDRA
I heard my phone’s ringing. Who’s that?

NEERA
It’s nothing.

Diandra checks the call logs and, doubting her sister’s indifference, and finds no Quinton’s name there.

FADE OUT

“DAY 2”

Neera and Diandra are walking to campus under the same umbrella. Both are stuck in an inevitable silence.

DIANDRA
No! I forgot something!

Neera turns her head toward Diandra’s. Diandra hands over her cellphone to her sister and back she goes. Neera accidentally glances Diandra’s cellphone and discovers a tall, fine-looking boy’s face in the wallpaper, showing the name “QUINTON”. A feeling of excitement creeps over her eyes.

FADE BLACK

Neera walks along campus backyard. Her eyes look straight frontward and finds, unexpeectedly, Quinton. Her excitement emblazons her eyes, but her smile answers her desires.

FADE OUT

EXT. CAMPUS YARD. EVENING.

Andrea and Diandra sit on the campus benchyard. The bestfriends are catching up laughing.

ANDREA
So, how’s Quinton?

Diandra’s face turns worrisome.

ANDREA
Has he called you lately?

DIANDRA
No.
(pause)
Not in a million years, I guess.
(pause)
You know him, no? Has she ever talked to you about me?

ANDREA
Nope.

FADE OUT

The screen shows “at the same time…at another place”

INT. APARTMENT. MORNING.

Neera fiddles with her cellphone before she hears a doorbell and walks along the living room. She goes out of the room and finds Quinton.

NEERA
Hey!

Quinton rolls her body.

FADE BLACK

“A day ago…”

EXT. OUTSIDE THE APARTMENT. EVENING.

Neera walks along the campusyard. Quinton walks toward her and smiles. She remembers his face on Diandra’s wallpaper and joyously grins.

FADE BLACK

“Day 3”

EXT. CAMPUS YARD. AFTERNOON.

Diandra looks something far behind her, walking on the stairs, finding some traces of her and Quinton back then there. She looks around and catches gloominess after all.

CUT TO:

EXT. CAMPUS YARD. EVENING.

NEERA
How could I stop you from talking about her?

QUINTON
What? I’m just asking.

NEERA
Give it a break, Quinton. She doesn’t like dolls!

QUINTON
Anyway, can I have a message or something?

Neera rolls her eyes leaves him.

QUINTON
Hey, Neera! Come on!

CUT TO:

Diandra walks toward her and Quinton’s favorite bench and now having a chat with a voice. She looks unsteadily joyous.

Hi!

DIANDRA
Hi! Long time no see. Where’ve you been?

I’ve been nowhere. Anyway, you’ve been a lot prettier, really.

DIANDRA
(blushes)
Stop it!

Diandra chats as if Quinton were there, laughing and looking happy. The camera zooms out and shows Diandra talking to nothing.

FADE OUT

INT. CASSETTE’S RESTROOM. EVENING.

Diandra, pimping herself, beautifully-dressed, looks into the mirror. Neera barges out off the restroom looking messed up.

NEERA
Going somewhere?

DIANDRA
Hm-hm. I’m going dating.

Neera winces.

DIANDRA
Toodle-oo!

Neera watches Diandra go out. She, as always, grins.

FADE BLACK

“Neera has always lived in hatred of her sister.”

“Diandra and Quinton never requisite.”

“The two sisters live hiding toward each other. They live in fragments of life…”

“…in imperfections.”

SPECIAL THANKS TO:
– Allah SWT. for making this intricate project happen.
– Monique Ariica, the perfect Neera Cassette. I’m gonna miss your “winces” and “grins.”
– Lidya Permata Sari who brings my character fully alive.
– Nadira Dhaifina, the busy bee. You are silver!
– Vera Citra Utami, for reenacting and recreating the original story to yours, which perfectly makes my day reading it.
– Dimas Arbrianto, another busy bee. I can’t thank you enough though you only came once at location :p
– Muhammad Fadilla Pratama, the accidental crew. God speed.
– Endah Nurhamidah, for lending me the video camera.
– Potret, for making each sequence of the movie warmer and sweeter.

REFERENCES
– Mostly everyone

WORDS COUNT: 749

Link dramatization:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7mIc6oirE-o&feature=youtu.be

6 thoughts on “Fragmented: A Short Movie

  1. 180410110176/A

    Why neera always hate her sister? This movies makes me have many question because this movies not much explain why neera doing that? And neera character is antagonist because in the beginning she delete call from quinto, but I still not understand why neera doing thats.

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    • 180410120025/B

      I didn’t know you were going to say that Neera “hates” her sister. I may say the fact that Neera deletes Quinton’s call log and finally encounters him in the middle of the movie, shows that Neera likes Quinton but hesitates to tell Diandra about it. Moreover, your being confused due to fragments and gaps here and there reaches my ultimate goal as in the movie title “Fragmented.” However, both of us know that this movie is far from perfect. :)

      Words: 81

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  2. I’ve been a fan of drama movies lately. Unlike other genres such as Action, Dramas tend to make the audience think and reflect the story of the movie to the audience lives. And your work is such a good example. You don’t explicitly explaining what is the main problem of the story through the movie narration and let the audience think and guess. That is probably why it’s not easy for some to understand your story. As you said, our works are still far from perfect, and that’s why I’ve some notes for you regarding your dramatization. Some transition and the editing are still raw and they prolonged the story that should have been more efficient. I know that it is not easy due to lack of time and experience, but once it is fixed, it’ll be a good one. But all in all, I love it. Nice job, wan!

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  3. 180410100170/Kelas B

    “A day ago…”(at 3:35-3:50) should be a day before “DAY 2” which is “DAY 1”. At 3:35-3:50, Neera meets Quinton and then asks his phone number. Neera remembers Quinton’s face on Diandra’s wallpaper. On the contrary, the scene when Neera sees Quinton’s picture (Neera accidentally glances Diandra’s cellphone and discovers a tall, fine-looking boy’s face in the wallpaper, showing the name “QUINTON”.) is on “DAY 2”. Do I get it wrong? There is no another day between “Day 1” and “Day 2”, isn’t it? The change of day is marked by “Day…” isn’t it? If I get it right, then there is a mistake on this story. If I get it wrong, then I’m sorry.

    (115 words)

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