The Red Mirror: A Short Prose


Summary: It is a story about a little family that consists of mother and two children, who are fighting with something evil in their new house.


Through a highway, I drove an old brown Cadillac to Pennsylvania with my family. My family and I were heading to our new house in Pennsylvania. Two hours later, we reached the destination. There was a big house surrounded by a lake and a forest on the back side of the house. I thought it was a perfect place for us to undergo our daily activities.

“Whooaa! It’s awesome! Mom, I want to see my room!” shouted my sister, Anna.

“Check it on the second floor, honey!” answered my mother, Mary, who was still tidying up our stuff with the workers in the living room.

My attention focused on one thing which was in the living room, a wooden cupboard covered with reddish dull mirror. I was staring on it seriously.

“Is there anything you need, master?” asked a middle-aged man appeared behind me.

“Whooaaa! You scared me!” I fell down suddenly, “Who the hell are you?!” I tried to stand up.

“Honey, he is Gustav, the housekeeper. From now on, he works for us. Be nice!” said my mother.

“Master, if you need something, just tell me,” said Gustav as he went to the backyard.

I was quite surprised by what happened a few minutes ago. Then I went on a little trip to the beautiful lake and the small forest behind the house to look for something good. Unfortunately, the weather was very cloudy, and the atmosphere was quite calm. It was a perfect place to take a break from activities by enjoying the environment. All of a sudden, on the other side of the lake, I saw someone that seemed to be staring at me, but I thought it was just a shadow. I could not see him clearly because it was foggy. A few moments later, the figure slowly disappeared. It began to rain, so I came back to the house.

We had been living in that house for five days when something strange occurred. We found pieces of bloody human bodies on the backside of my house. I thought it was a nightmare in our real life. We began to worry about all of this, especially when I saw the blood that pooled around the house. And then, I tried to investigate what was happening. The next day, when I passed and looked on the surface of the mirror, I saw a little crack.

“They are waiting for us, the traitors of God. Believe it! God will save us, master,” Gustav whispered to me with a stressful face.

“What are you talking about? Is there any connection between this mirror and all phenomena that happened before?? Tell me Gustav!”

I tried to find out the root of these problems. After I insisted him, he finally explained it clearly.

Actually, this phenomenon had happened for decades. It was related with the red mirror that we had in the house. The area had been surrounded by several kinds of hellish creatures, and the function of the mirror was to protect this house from beasts which were waiting for us at the outside. They were trying to take our soul to be brought down to hell as sacrifices. Once the mirror was cracked, the dimensional equilibrium between our world and their world became unstable, as if, the mirror became a double-edged sword. The beasts could cross dimensions, but they could not attack us because we were protected by the mirror. The only way that we could use to eliminate them was to break the mirror, but it needed two people to break it from the outside of the house.

On Sunday evening, we prepared everything that we needed. When it was getting dark, Anna and I walked on the backyard in order to attract those beasts. The wind was blowing very strong. Suddenly, the beasts appeared from the small forest with several terrifying forms, and the biggest one was a Cerberus, a dog with three fiery heads from hell. We were very scared and spontaneously ran into the house to meet Gustav, who had brought the mirror to the other side of the backyard. When we were almost there, Cerberus was already in the backyard and it tried to hit Gustav with its tail very quickly. Gustav dodged the attack, and he flied to make a counterattack by kicking one of Cerberus’s heads. In fact, Gustav was an angel from heaven assigned by God to resolve this mess.

I tried to move the mirror to the other side. Anna helped me by holding the mirror, and I gave a sign to Gustav, who was still fighting with the dog. After Gustav gave the ultimate punch to Cerberus, he took the dog to the mirror. Before they left, Gustav said his last word to us.

“Good bye, kids…” said Gustav.

“Gustaaaaaaaavvvvvvvv…!!!!” Anna shouted.

Soon, Gustav dragged the dog into the mirror. While the mirror was emitting very bright light, as soon as possible I broke it. The mirror shattered into small pieces, and the nightmare was over. It was quiet for a moment.

“Anna…it’s over. Let’s go back. I know how you feel,” said I as I hugged her.

“I know. It sucks.” said Anna as she went inside.

The next day, the sun was shining brightly, and the rain had stopped. Maybe it was the first time for Anna and me to see something strange that made us traumatic, especially my sister. Actually, I did not understand what happened yesterday. It needed two days to bring the situation back to normal and to clean up the rest of the mess. Finally, my mother came home and told us that we had to move again to New York because of her unfinished business. She felt worried if she had to leave her children alone, so we left the house to seek a new life, again. As we left the house, there was a shadow standing and grinning to us from the distance, and then it disappeared.


Thank you to Sky Sucahyo and Dimas Arbrianto for proofreading.


– Wan, James. (2013). The Conjuring. United States: Warner Bros. Pictures

– Wan, James. (2010). Insidious. United States: Warner Bros. Pictures

– Edgar Allan Poe’s The Black Cat

Word Count: (1000)

Link for work dramatization.

9 thoughts on “The Red Mirror: A Short Prose

  1. 180410100231/B

    When I read the beginning part of this story, it can make me scared. However, I keep reading until the middle part, but I think the atmosphere changes, I am not scared, it just make me want to know the ending will be because of the cracked mirror. Then I think It’s something weird about it. The writer said because of the cracked mirror, the dimensional equilibrium is unstable, then it is just the mirror to protect but the next sentence, the writer said to eliminate the evil is by breaking the mirror. So I think if the mirror breaks, it cannot protect again. I also get upset for the ending, it is lack of my attention, because I predict more, I hope it should be unpredictable.


  2. Yuriani Siti Zuhroh / 180410100245 / E

    uhm, I agree with you Sartika. When the first I read this short prose I feel scary, but one thing that make me interested to read this is abot the title of this story, it can make me want to read it unxiously. I think the story is interesting, but the ending is dissatisfied. The story is based on The Conjuring Movie, and I think actually you can make it more interesting maybe you can add/use more scary scene and ending the story with the things that will make us (reader) want to keep reading your story. but I know it will to much for it, and I appreciate you have do your best :))


  3. To me it, the end of this story was anti-climactic, and there’s still some a lot of details missing. for example, you did not give the explanation about Gustav who is really and angel. like out of nowhere he just evolved into an angel. Also you could’ve chosen a better monster than cerberus. I mean why don’t you just made Hades to go after them himself, I think it would be much better. But overall, this story is cool to make a movie with. Aside from the plot being the same as any other horror movies, it’s still is cool to have stuff like this made into a movie.


  4. Annisa Hapsari

    This is an interesting story for me. The way you show the existence and the function of the red mirror are good, at least, you did not fail to describe it. However, I found that the dialogues between the children and Gustav when they are about to separate are little awkward. I think it should be meaningful, unfortunately it is not. It would be nice if you remove the dialogues and describe their feelings through the narration, instead. The plot is quiet rush, so the story did not carry me away, but overall, your story is nice. I like it!

    Word Count: (100)


  5. 180410120135
    Kelas G

    You made a good cliffhanger over there, pal. The narrator problem’s does not end when the mirror has successfully been destroyed. I mean, it has already been mentioned there, if the function of the mirror was to protect the house from the hellish creatures around there. Therefore, I assume, if the mirror is destroyed, the hellish creatures will be able to attack them from now on. The shadow that the narrator saw at the end of the story may be one of the sign from further problems that will occur to the narrator in his following days. In my opinion, without this act of destroying the mirror, such a good cliffhanger like this would be impossible to be me made.

    (120 words)


  6. 180410120141

    It is cool story where the angel and the beast involved in human’s life.
    When I first read I guess this is a horror story, because the setting that mentioned is little bit creepy. But as I continued reading the story turned on to be a fantasy story. I am surprised that the odd old man Gustav is an angel. But unfortunately the plot in this story takes place too quickly, so many scenes that seem not clear. For example, that is at the time of the fight against the Cerberus. It should be a fierce battle between Gustav and the Cerberus. Especially if Gustav’s ultimate punch is mentioned more clearly and how the impact to the Cerberus. But the overall story is really awesome.

    (125 words)


  7. 180410120020/C

    Actually the idea of the story is very common in horror story plot. The difference between yours and the other horror stories is the pointed red mirror. It will become a better story if you put more description to each character and scene, but I do understand with the word limitation (you made it exactly 1,000 words! Wow!). I am very sorry, but I cannot feel the spooky atmosphere you are trying to deliver through this story, especially in the battle scene. It should be the climax of this story I thought, but you just do not describe it in more detail. Yet, there is the best part of this story that makes me got goosebumps when I read it, it is the last sentence.


  8. 180410120103/E

    The story has a good plot, though I guess it would need more than a 1000 words to tell the story. But with the word limit, you did the story sufficient justice. The only thing that still makes the story awkward is how you end the story itself. You could balance the beginning of the story with the ending to make it seem more equal, because the story seemed to end too abruptly while the beginning is a bit too prolonged. Maybe you wanted it to be like that, but too much cliffhanging would hurt your reader’s head. But, as I have said, you have done the story sufficient justice.


  9. 180410120144

    I think you successfully bring nuance of gothic to your story. Your choice of word is able to show spooky and scary effect such as, “old”, “forest”, “foggy”, “disappear”, “nightmare”, “phenomena” and “dimension”. These words give scary atmosphere to your story. Moreover, the title of your story describes the genre of your story clearly. The impression of fear is not only shown at the text but also in the dramatization of the story. The narrator can read the text very well and give sense of fear to me when I listened to it. I like your knowledge about the dimensional equilibrium and Greek and Roman mythology (Cerberus). It adds more sense of fear, because the mythology gives sense of mystery. Your knowledge which combine with your imagination (mirror is a portal between one dimension to other dimension) perfectly creates a horror story.

    (142 words)


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